- I would try to split out the words so there is no scroll bar or make the height of the game a bit bigger. So I don't need to scroll to read the text
- I like the setting of the story and the way it is written. I can sense the coldness and the quietness of the world.
- I also like that it's short. I do a bit of reading every now and then. But reading longer stuff feels like a commitment. I could see more short stories done like this as some sort of anthology. Could also get people more into reading haha.
- Might be nice have some ambient music or sound effect after you choose a choice. (something you can toggle on / off)
- Second choice made in the game is oddly worded. I think I would just remove the sentence before it. (I see it work pretty well in the lines after this)
- Also the building where the player isn't sure. Maybe you can preface by saying it's some institutional building, that may have been a school, hospital, or prison. Then you can link text saying "Enter the institutional" building
Overall the game is enjoyable to me and would like to read more like this. Keep up the good work!
Thank you very much for your feedback! It was intended more for fullscreen, and I do see there are issues when playing via browser preview. I will try to work on that. Thanks for all the comments on the writing, too, I'll make sure to consider all of them when planning an update.
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- I would try to split out the words so there is no scroll bar or make the height of the game a bit bigger. So I don't need to scroll to read the text
- I like the setting of the story and the way it is written. I can sense the coldness and the quietness of the world.
- I also like that it's short. I do a bit of reading every now and then. But reading longer stuff feels like a commitment. I could see more short stories done like this as some sort of anthology. Could also get people more into reading haha.
- Might be nice have some ambient music or sound effect after you choose a choice. (something you can toggle on / off)
- Second choice made in the game is oddly worded. I think I would just remove the sentence before it. (I see it work pretty well in the lines after this)
- Also the building where the player isn't sure. Maybe you can preface by saying it's some institutional building, that may have been a school, hospital, or prison. Then you can link text saying "Enter the institutional" building
Overall the game is enjoyable to me and would like to read more like this. Keep up the good work!
Thank you very much for your feedback! It was intended more for fullscreen, and I do see there are issues when playing via browser preview. I will try to work on that. Thanks for all the comments on the writing, too, I'll make sure to consider all of them when planning an update.
Have a good weekend :)